Monday, February 25, 2008
Glossing: Essay 2
The theme that stayed pretty consistent in my essay is that technology is a valuable source, but that it also affects human communication styles and how communication is beginning to become a lost art. I was surprised that my essay gravitated specifically toward communication and this specific topic or theme. There weren’t themes that did not fit into my topic, probably because my topic is very broad and general. I believe that this is probably an indicator that I need to narrow my research and writing. Maybe the opposite topic should be further probed: how has technology enhanced our communications developments? The paper really is not designed to be argumentative, so I think it would be best to further develop this issue. Throughout the paper, I move back and forth through personal experience and then to public information. Throughout the glossing activity, I noticed that maybe I should perhaps add some more personal experience. I think that my organization can also be further developed. I believe that it would be helpful to have a set organized lay-out without randomly moving throughout the conversational qualities. The glossing activity also made me realize that I am perhaps a bit repetitive with some of the main points, so this too shows me that I need to work on my organization. In general, the glossing activity helped me view the general direction of my paper and made it easier for me to sort out through long paragraphs and pages of information.
Monday, February 11, 2008
Technology Topic: Essay 2
Assignment for February 13, 2008: Write a blog that introduces your TQR.
Topic - Remember that the topic needs to be related to technology in some way. In your blog, briefly describe your topic.
My topic of concern for my essay is the influence of technology on relationships. I am interested in this topic and I am hoping to discover whether technology enhances or hinders a relationship.
Question - Follow the qualifications listed on pp. 456-57 to ensure your question is researchable. In your blog, share your question and why you think it is a researchable question.
Question: Does modern-day technology enhance or hinder a relationship (and/or does it do both)?
Is it the right size?
I believe that this topic is not too specific, nor too large. It concentrates relationships specifically in the general scope of technology.
Has something already been said about it?
I have done some searching and have found plenty of valid sources and available information on this particular topic. Eharmony is an online dating sight, and I may want to include this in my paper of technology and the effect it has on relationships.
Does it raise more questions?
I believe that I will have extended inquiry on this topic, especially when I begin my research. I am sure that I will come across different types of technology and the effect it has on different types of relationships: family, spousal, friendships, business, etc. I may even want to narrow my topic depending on my research ability.
Does it matter?
I believe that this information will be interesting and relevant to other people too. I believe it will ask the readers to inquire about their personal relationships and the effect of the technology (directly or indirectly) on their relationships.
Rationale - Think about why you are interested in this topic. In your blog, reflect on why you want to research this topic (or answer this question), what you hope/want to get out of your research, and how your question matters.
I am interested in this topic because I have personal stories that I can relate to. My brother lives overseas in England, and I only get to see him in person once every year during Christmas. If I had no way to communicate with him, I believe it would be difficult to maintain a personal relationship with him. Whether it be with a letters (paper and pens are considered technology, right?), or the telephone, or seeing him over skype (a computer technology that uses a camera, so you can see the other person being talked to); I am able to communicate and maintain contact and conversation. But, I am also curious to research whether technology can hurt or hinder a relationship. With advanced cell phones, computers, and internet access; I believe that people can get carried away and use their quality time with technology that would be spent with the significant other if technology were not present. This question matters to people in modern day society because it would make people think about their priorities and, hopefully, be more aware of their relationships and how technology may influence a relationship.
Topic - Remember that the topic needs to be related to technology in some way. In your blog, briefly describe your topic.
My topic of concern for my essay is the influence of technology on relationships. I am interested in this topic and I am hoping to discover whether technology enhances or hinders a relationship.
Question - Follow the qualifications listed on pp. 456-57 to ensure your question is researchable. In your blog, share your question and why you think it is a researchable question.
Question: Does modern-day technology enhance or hinder a relationship (and/or does it do both)?
Is it the right size?
I believe that this topic is not too specific, nor too large. It concentrates relationships specifically in the general scope of technology.
Has something already been said about it?
I have done some searching and have found plenty of valid sources and available information on this particular topic. Eharmony is an online dating sight, and I may want to include this in my paper of technology and the effect it has on relationships.
Does it raise more questions?
I believe that I will have extended inquiry on this topic, especially when I begin my research. I am sure that I will come across different types of technology and the effect it has on different types of relationships: family, spousal, friendships, business, etc. I may even want to narrow my topic depending on my research ability.
Does it matter?
I believe that this information will be interesting and relevant to other people too. I believe it will ask the readers to inquire about their personal relationships and the effect of the technology (directly or indirectly) on their relationships.
Rationale - Think about why you are interested in this topic. In your blog, reflect on why you want to research this topic (or answer this question), what you hope/want to get out of your research, and how your question matters.
I am interested in this topic because I have personal stories that I can relate to. My brother lives overseas in England, and I only get to see him in person once every year during Christmas. If I had no way to communicate with him, I believe it would be difficult to maintain a personal relationship with him. Whether it be with a letters (paper and pens are considered technology, right?), or the telephone, or seeing him over skype (a computer technology that uses a camera, so you can see the other person being talked to); I am able to communicate and maintain contact and conversation. But, I am also curious to research whether technology can hurt or hinder a relationship. With advanced cell phones, computers, and internet access; I believe that people can get carried away and use their quality time with technology that would be spent with the significant other if technology were not present. This question matters to people in modern day society because it would make people think about their priorities and, hopefully, be more aware of their relationships and how technology may influence a relationship.
Friday, February 1, 2008
Reflection of Peer Workshop 1 for Personal Essay
Review the comments provided from your peers on your drafts. Write a blog in which you describe what revisions you intend to make based on the suggestions of your peers.
This past week of working on my essay was difficult. I would have doubts if I were writing about an interesting topic that others could relate to. I have a passion for water-skiing. It is an incredible hobby of mine that I treasure, but I think that when I am telling the story, I get so excited that I forget that the reader may never have even tried water-skiing before. I tried my best to clarify and to put the reader in my “bindings” so that they knew what it felt like. Lauren said, “I love how you describe water-skiing- I feel the same way about it and you captured it exactly.” That made me more confident that I had clearly expressed my experiences and that others could relate to my story- an integral part of a personal essay. I also took risks in writing in a way that I have never tried before. I am writing from several different perspectives: what I feel at the time I am skiing, what my grandfather would feel, and flashbacks from my childhood event. I felt the time we spent today was useful because Lauren and George made great comments on what they understood, and also made suggestions on what they thought would improve the essay. I am going to elaborate on my conclusion, and I plan to clarify on “what my grandmother and mother saw” in one of my flashbacks. Lauren advised to elaborate a bit more on my grandfather and what he means to me.
This past week of working on my essay was difficult. I would have doubts if I were writing about an interesting topic that others could relate to. I have a passion for water-skiing. It is an incredible hobby of mine that I treasure, but I think that when I am telling the story, I get so excited that I forget that the reader may never have even tried water-skiing before. I tried my best to clarify and to put the reader in my “bindings” so that they knew what it felt like. Lauren said, “I love how you describe water-skiing- I feel the same way about it and you captured it exactly.” That made me more confident that I had clearly expressed my experiences and that others could relate to my story- an integral part of a personal essay. I also took risks in writing in a way that I have never tried before. I am writing from several different perspectives: what I feel at the time I am skiing, what my grandfather would feel, and flashbacks from my childhood event. I felt the time we spent today was useful because Lauren and George made great comments on what they understood, and also made suggestions on what they thought would improve the essay. I am going to elaborate on my conclusion, and I plan to clarify on “what my grandmother and mother saw” in one of my flashbacks. Lauren advised to elaborate a bit more on my grandfather and what he means to me.
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